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11-24-2012, 04:53 PM | #1 |
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Anyone Willing to Review My Personal Statement for UCs?
Anyone want to review my college essay? Proof-reading, suggestions, and questions that come up after reading the personal statement are all welcome.
It will not take long to read (1000 words) and I can use any input I can get. I figure there are many college students/graduates on this board. Thanks! I'll PM my essay to anyone willing to do me a favor. |
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11-24-2012, 06:18 PM | #3 |
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just as long as the word BMW is not in your PS you should be fine.
sure, send it over.
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11-25-2012, 07:31 PM | #10 |
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What a coincidence OP. My brother is also applying for the University of California schools. I'm also helping him with his personal statement. He's applying for the Berkeley, Irvine, Los Angeles, and the Davis campus. Are you applying to all campuses?
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i'd be willing to take a look, but first what UCs are you applying to? and what's your hs gpa? and what major?
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sure, send it over, my e-mail is my username @gmail.com, i am a cum laude graduate from ucsd in econ so u should be right up my alley sweet, congrats, good luck
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11-26-2012, 01:22 AM | #16 |
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The waiting is the worst part of the whole application process.
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i got into uc all. though i was deemed unworthy of a free ride. it's cool, just take it out of my alumni contributions. cornell actually gave me the best deal (i didn't take it, but thanks cornell). and then there's stanfurd and mit which rejected me: live it down. can you believe it? when i went in for my mit interview, the bitch actually answered the door in her pajamas? yeah. Last edited by amanda hor$t; 11-26-2012 at 02:13 AM.. |
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I'd be happy to review it. I review personal statements for hiring banking officers, and while it isn't the same as a university entrance statement, it still has a lot of similarities.
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11-29-2012, 09:10 AM | #20 |
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If this is true it would be hard to pass up. Scholarship at an Ivy League school?
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Would you recommend Berkeley over LA? From what I've heard there is unnecessary grade-deflation, and the campus did not seem very sociable when stopped by on a family trip to sf.
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